This is what I tried. It actually came out better than i expected. Its been made as three parts, to be inserted at different places in a bigger graphic novel (I have already thought of the plot of that one!). Page 1 is the first part. Pages 2 - 5 constitute the second. Pages 6 and 7 cover the last.
As with most of my themes, this too is dark and disturbing. Looking forward to your comments.
4 comments:
loved it. Quite a story in 7 odd panels.
On a more critical note, the narration is jerky, switching from past to present, from first person to third person, apparently intended, but not very good.
But again i'll say, great story and good art. Try making panels. would look better.
nice story, good work , i think the narrations needs improvements, try using panels, the ortwork is ok , but either make it completely out of proportion or like sketch its kind of a mixture of both , but really good , keep it up
aneesh and goku, thanks guys. that was valuable feedback.
the story is interesting... but as one already pointed out.. i wish the narration was a bit less shifty.. art work is fine.. have u trieds coloring it .. to set the atmosphere..
any way nice,,love to read more of urs
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